tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1848352874270072541.post3441516705146651730..comments2018-02-25T18:55:12.624-08:00Comments on Whisper on the Wind: Shine (Poem)lorien13http://www.blogger.com/profile/07064596129198837366noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1848352874270072541.post-90664662546528115882013-10-04T16:16:45.022-07:002013-10-04T16:16:45.022-07:00And here I am with "Shine."
"I jus...And here I am with "Shine."<br /><br />"I just put my emotions down."<br />I know you don't like this movie, but that makes me think of the lesson on writing poetry that the teacher gives in Dead Poets' Society. He has a student who didn't write his poetry assignment because he's basically like, "I can't write a poem," and so the teacher teaches him how to basically just spill his emotions, which is basically how you write a poem. And that's great, because a lot of the best poetry is free-form like yours, and is just emotion. And I like that.<br /><br />Anway...<br /><br />I'd like to see you write a rhyming poem, just to see how it sounds.<br />I used to be able to churn out sonnets in iambic pentameter when I was in high school, but now I'm out of practice.<br /><br />Man, I'm hungry.<br />Can't wait for tacos.<br />Just felt like sharing. You know I can be random sometimes.<br /><br />Anywho, what was I saying? Ah! As I said before, some of the best poems I've ever read or heard are free-form and don't necessarily rhyme. Like the guy who plays Theo on The Cosby Show! I saw him do a poem on a live broadcast of this poetry night or something that my dad was watching and it was the coolest thing! I wish I remembered how it went, but it was at least 10 years ago...<br /><br />I should have Nuada write Dylan poetry. In Celtic Ireland, a man wasn't considered a man if he couldn't write poetry. Hmmm...<br /><br />"I'm afraid your attempts failed."<br />I see you saying this in a sweet, eff-you voice to your enemies.<br />Nice.<br />=D<br /><br />"But I didn't"<br />Because you're brave.<br />Just thought I should mention that.<br /><br />You used the words "thirsting" and "balk" in a poem.<br />I love you.<br />More than I normally do, I mean.<br /><br />And then you talk about the maws of chasms stretching and wonder why I think you're so amazing! Why do you wonder? It's like you don't even see your own brilliance, and I let you wallow in ignorance instead of shoving you in front of a mirror. Why don't I shove you in front of mirror?<br /><br />"No future"<br />Psht. You have one.<br />It's just taking its sweet time getting here.<br />Stupid future.<br />Live in the moment!<br /><br />"All talent<br />No strength"<br />Yeah, whatevs<br />Don't make me poke your muscles<br />Both physical and emotional<br /><br />"The whispers and lies<br />Circling like vultures<br />Scenting my blood"<br />O.O<br />This is beautifully written and beautifully expressed.<br />Your poetry is amazing.<br />Just saying.<br /><br />"So step back<br />And watch me shine"<br />I do. All the time. I just put on my shades and watch the fireworks.<br />=D<br /><br />Love you!LA Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09724835436416212038noreply@blogger.com